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Now the machine is very complex, a lot of difficult work to be automated. Machine automation development pros and cons?

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The world that we are living in right now is well-defined as the technology world.Nowadays every single
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 operation has been automated.
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 industrialization development does have both pros and cons, let us see through my eyes.
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 , the automated appliance will make our day-to-day life very easier, For ,instance the huge factory, plants and production units will need more manpower to produce goods in an accurate manner to increase the sales figure in the competitive market to achieve the customer requirement. Meanwhile in the medical field automation made it indelible to find the exact disease, and do operations to treat the patient's illness as well.Mechanization made tremendous benefits in education, construction,security systems,Information technology and etc. In the beginning ,era there is no
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 thing as called automated machines, it was all operated by human beings , which is crucial to handle as well, the introduction of automatic
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 as robotic science reduces human error and
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 save the loss of human life. But there are some disadvantages , in my ,opinion the human being daily life depends on work and monthly pay to run their family.
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 development in automation machines will affect employment in many companies which will increase the unemployment rate in the country will be spiking than usual. The result of unemployment will lead to poverty among the people. Conclusively, The science and technology in the automated
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 will have both sides like a coin it's in our hands what we are choosing.Too much of anything will
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 affect the human being a normal lifestyle and the economical growth of the country. So making use of the automated machines in the required field to reduce the burden of human beings is good not a replacement for human beings.
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