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In many places, students must arrive very early in the morning to attend school. Some people believe that starting the school day early is the best approach to support learning, but others believe that starting the school day at a later time in the morning would be better for students. Which view do you agree with and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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School
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 life contributes to an important milestone in one's life. It becomes a part and parcel of our life. It forms the basis of our character, action, and our behaviour.
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, it is very critical to understand whether
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to attend
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 early or late.
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 some may assert that reporting to
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 at a later time in the morning is better , I
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 believe that getting to start schooling early in the
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 is more beneficial, mainly for two reasons, which I shall delve into in the following essay. The foremost reason is that during the morning ,hours we are able to conceive and retain more information and notes than during mid-
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, as our minds are fresh and active.
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, it fosters an ability to gain information rather quickly, which in turn provides a competitive edge over others.
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, I never realised the importance of
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 until I became older, from my own experience I really felt that waking up early in the morning brings about a sense of peace and tranquillity which allows us to get focused and concentrated for the
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 ahead.
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 it might be difficult and a little struggle for some to rise up early in the beginning, eventually once we get the handle
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 it, we can reap its benefits.
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, just
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 the Sunrise
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 in the morning, our body
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 has a nocturnal circadian
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 which helps us to wake early. Without a doubt,
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rhythm
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 is something which needs to
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nourished
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. Just as an idiom goes, "the early bird gets the worm," which signifies the maximum potential to utilize the morning
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.
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,
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 is very notable in each of our lives. As we travel to
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, we often sleep at the wrong time, but
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 actually relates to our original body
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. In conclusion, some may prefer that coming later to
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 is beneficial mainly to escape the morning rush or maybe to sleep a little longer. But from my point, I prefer to start my
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 early so that I would get the remaining
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 for personal things.
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