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The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011

The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011
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The bar chart gave information about the
proportion
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 of
households
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 in owned and
people
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rented
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who rented
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 housing in two countries, namely England and Wales over a period of 94 years, starting from 1918 to 2011.
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, it can be seen that the
percentage
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 of
people
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 owning housing
was
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slightly decreased year by year.
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, the opposite was true for
households
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 in rented accommodation .
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, the figure for
people
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owned
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who owned
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 housing was similar compared to the rate of
people
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rented
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who rented
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 housing. The
proportion
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 of
households
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 in owned housing decreased slightly from 76% to 68% in the first 21 years. The
percentage
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 of
people
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 who owned housing was highest in 1918, the opposite was true for the rate of
people
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 who rented housing. The
proportion
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 of
households
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 in owned accommodation witnessed a stable trend of 68% between 1939 and 1953. That was a considerable fall of about 40%. The figure was similar to the rate of
people
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 who rented housing in 1971. The
percentage
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 of
people
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 who owned housing was a slight decrease
of
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 about 5% from 2001 to 2011. The
percentage
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 of
households
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 in rented housing slightly decreased by about 10%. That was a stable trend of more than 65% between 1939 and 1953. The figure was a sharp increase of nearly 40% over a period of 63 years starting from 1939 to 2001. There was a marginal fall
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 approximately 5% from 2001 to 2011. The
proportion
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 of
people
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 who rented was highest in 2001,
in contrast
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 to rented housing was rented .
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, households, people, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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