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the table below shows the daily oil in from 2000 to 2004

the table below shows the daily oil in from 2000 to 2004
The table chart reveals the fossil fuel production of four distinct countries namely
Nigeria
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, Cha, Congo,
Somalia
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and Somalia
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 in a 4-
year
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 period, commencing 2000.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that Chad has not entered the race but
then
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 the nation started to produce oil
since
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in
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 2003 with a low level of production. Another notable point is that whilst Congo held the crown at
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first
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,
Nigeria
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 took
the
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first
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 place in the
last
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year
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. Look at the chart in more detail, 205k barrels belonged to
Nigeria
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 in the
first
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year
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, followed by a gradual rise to 210k in the next
year
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.
In contrast
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, the
first
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year
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 of Congo underwent a significant fall
by
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of
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 41k from 275k barrels, followed by a steady downward trend to 203k in 2004. The daily oil production of
Nigeria
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 experienced a dramatic decline to 190k in 2002 before rising back to 210k and 213k in 2003 and 2004 respectively. Starting at 5k per day in 2000, followed by a steady rise to 8k in the next
year
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. The number of Somalia increased considerably to 17k in 2002, which doubled that of 2001. Meanwhile, Chad did not produce any barrels until 2003, the number started at 8k per day, which is 6 times lower than that of Chad in 2004.
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, Somalia underwent a significant growth to 21k and 50k in 2003 and 2004
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in turn
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nigeria, first, year, k with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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