some people beleive that when designing a building, the most important thing to be considered is the function rather than the outward appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

In the present world, building structure becomes the most controversial
while
outward
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appearance is
ignoring
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due to
many reasons. It is agreed that building should
be well functioned
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well function
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. Increasing the population will make the limited
space
as well as
eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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building
structure
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structures
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will prove
this
argument.
To begin
,
High
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population is struggling with small
space
.
Therefore
, most
of
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the
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people
are trying to get
benefits
from
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the well
a well
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well structured
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building
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buildings
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.
For instance
, Malaysia builds residential homes for
people
those
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apply
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who are living in the city side. It helps
for
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many
people
to live in the same
space
effectively.
Furthermore
, most of the building structures are creating
to
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unfriendly
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an unfriendly
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method
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for
environment
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.
People
are only thinking about
the
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appearance. So,
it
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its
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effects
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affects
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on
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the
environments
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environment
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badly. As an example, recently turkey gets
the
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huge earthquake and they have loosed lives more than 20000
of
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apply
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people
due to
bad building
structure
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structures
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which
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created without thinking environment. Some
people
build by destroying the rainforest and the
rives
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rivers
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for looking. It will make the road to
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the extinctions
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extinctions
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extinction
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of human and animal lives. Every
space
, we should use
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it usefully
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usefully
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instead
of destroying the
space
. In conclusion,
effective
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building will give
benefits
for
environment
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the environment
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as well as
human
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humans
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.
Also
,
human
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a human
the human
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can manage their valuable limited
space
with high
benefits
.
However
, every country should apply rules for
construction
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the construction
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field.
Then
people
will focus on
the
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environmental
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friendly building structures and It will give more
benefits
to the world.
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