Some people think that children should be home schooled when they are very young while others think it is better for them to attend a kindergarten. Which do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

some individuals propose that
children
are better to go to
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primary
schools
when they are younger rather than going to
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kindergarten.As
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see,
such
impulsive alterings in
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educational
scheme
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can negatively
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on
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children
and
parents
respectively.The factors
such
as lack of time flexibility for
parents
along with
not appropriate supervising of
children
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the
majorest
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major
proofs to not to replace a traditional method.
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,
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prioritising
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schools
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instead
of
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kindergartens
kindergarten
exclusively
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children
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ages would harm
parents
as
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the
schools
had their own timetables which
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untouchable
whereas
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kindergartens
have specific ones.
Therefore
parents
may find it challenging to distribute their time to work and
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care of their child.
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situation in 2020
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provocative
provoked
the closure of literally all types of educational organisations where
firstly
the
kindergardens
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kindergartens
kindergarten
had been closed off .
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,
parents
were struggling with
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timing and brought their
children
to unofficial organisations which
where
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based on school education
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.Eventually,
children
misunderstood the given materials
whereas
their
parents
realized that it would be much more appropriate to keep their babies at home.
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kindergarden
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kindergarten
system will be beneficial.Being
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interested
in the result they conducted various experiments devoted to nursery
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replacement .
For example
,in Zarafshan,
while
infant
schools
were closed for
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antibacterial cleaning ,the government school and its teachers were serving as a variant where to keep
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of
children
.
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interviewing academic teachers,they said that it was extremely difficult to supervise
children
as they were not prepared at all. To wrap up,by altering the origin system there is no
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care takers
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will benefit
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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