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People are surrounded by advertising. This both affects what people think is important and has a negative impact on people’s lives.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #impact #people’s #lives
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 of people who visited
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 museum
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before
 and after refurbishment. And it gives the result of surveys made
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after
 asking the visitors about how much they are satisfied with their visit.
Overall
, we can see in the
year
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before
 there is 30
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 of them satisfied
although
 in the
year
 after the number is more and reach 40.
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 the number of visitors
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 increased to 92000 where it was 74 000
befor
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before
for
 refurbishment.
year
befor
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before
, there are 40 of them are dissatisfies ,and 10 are very dissatisfied and both these
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numbers
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resemble
 50 ,which is a high number.
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, there are 30
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satisfied people ,and 15
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very satisfied .
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, 5 of them did not
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. the
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 after
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 has
a
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better numbers in the satisfied category which is 40 ,and 35 in the very satisfied ,so both of these numbers
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resemble
 the
bigest
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biggest
 group ,
whereas
 no response and very dissatisfied are 5 for each one ,and they are the
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 groups .
furthermore
 , 15 of them only are dissatisfied.
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