in many countries, more and more young people are leaving school and unable to find jobs after graduation. What problems do you think youth unemployment will cause to the individual and society? give reasons and make some suggestions.

Unemployment is on the rise, with juvenile
people
seeking
for
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job
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after getting
high
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school diploma
are
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increasing year on year.
This
phenomenon will result in
catasrophic complictions
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catastrophic complications
,
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if any prompt and effective acts are not accomplished by the government. There are some causes and solutions surrounding
this
event. The consequences of being jobless for
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an adolescent
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adolescent
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is not negligible,
inticing
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enticing
individuals to do unlawful actions
such
as
smiggling
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smuggling
or burglary.
Moreover
, without
occupation
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anyone cannot make
the
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ends meet,
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rising living
neccessities
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necessities
, the more you get frustrated and demotivated.
Last
but not least, if
people
have no work to do so they will be tempted to incline to addiction or even worse,
commiting sucide
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commit suicide
. There are numerous reasons which resulted
to
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people
not
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successful in finding careers;
for instance
, modern
sociaties
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societies
need
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workforce for their demanding jobs, and
consequently
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an ordinary worker is absolutely not
capble
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capable
able
to afford
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occupatonal
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occupational
expectation
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. What is more,
by coming
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artifical inteligence
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artificial intelligence
such
easy
job
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jobs
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like taxi
driver
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drivers
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or delivery
person
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persons
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will not be needed any more. As a solution, young
people
should be encouraged to go for higher education and be trained for those
proffessions
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professions
professionals
that they think will have their own markets in the future.
To conclude
, unemployment for
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not
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qualified is going to be an undeniable part of modernisation,
while
the youth are not prepared for it, the feasible approach is
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workforce.
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Fully address all parts of the task, including the problems caused by youth unemployment and specific suggestions to mitigate these issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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