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Most artists earn low salaries and should therefore receive funding from the government in order for them to continue their work. To what extent do you agree?

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It is undeniable fact that recently
artists
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 get unsatisfactory salaries. Some people assume that the
governement
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government
 should take a role to pay the
artists
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. The writer completely agrees with
this
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 statement
due to
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 their effort and the
duration
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 of the nation. To commence with, the government’s crucial role is to develop the prosperity of
the
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society. One of the actions that
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is preferrable
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preferrable
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 is
increase
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 the salary of
artists
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 who have low annual income or underground economic.
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this
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, the artist will create the
arts
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art
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 with high-quality
equipments
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equipment
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 and materials, which results in the best product of
arts
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art
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.
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,
the
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artists
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 in the United States create the most enormous statues in the world owing to the funds of
government
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the government
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. Because of
this
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, the country will be known and many tourists visit the nation, which increase the country’s income. Another point to consider is the
duration
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 of the work of the
artists
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. These days, a lot of
artists
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 should make products using recent technologies. Unfortunately, some
artists
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 can not afford it
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lack
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 of money.
This
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 contributes to
long
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duration
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 of work, unskilled and demotivated of the artist. To illustrate
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, if the artmaker is unmotivated to create several products, they will be unemployed, which
spike
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spikes
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 the number of
unemployment
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 and poverty in the nation.
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, the country spends more money
for
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 social funding and
dip
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 the income of the state.
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, the writer totally agrees to expand the funds of
artists
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 because of the
marvelous
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 action and
duration
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 of the country.

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