The table below gives information about student enrolments at Bristol University in 1928, 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Bristol University in 1928, 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the
number
of students registered at Bristol University in 1928, 1958 and 2008.
Overall
, it can be seen that student enrolments increase dramatically over the years, all started with only 218 people but in 2008
this
number
increased reached almost 6,400. The percentage of them came from overseas rose
similarly
and the
last
figure accounted for 28%
instead
of the 5% accounted for in 1928. A more widely look, reveals that the
number
of females presented in the University rose
at the end
respect the initial situation, but in 1958
this
fell to 32%,
thus
10% lower than in 1928.
While
the
number
of males increases between 1928 and 1958, it drop off to 46% in 2008. It is
also
clear that a lower amount of students came from near Bristol, and
on
Change preposition
in
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the table,
this
data represents the greatest drop.
Instead
, always more people came from other countries over the years.
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