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The most effective way to solve traffic problems in the cities is to encourage people from suburbs or the countryside to live in the cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#traffic #cities #people #suburbs #countryside
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Over the past few decades,
traffic
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 and
pollution
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 is one of the biggest issues in the nation. It is a common public opinion that-, the correct solution,
of
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traffic
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 is,
encourage
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to encourage
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people
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 to stay away from
cities
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 and live in rural areas. I vehemently agree with the statement. In the modern era,
people
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 are wasting their valuable
time
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 in
traffic
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. If a person
need
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 to go somewhere, he or she
need
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 to leave home as earlier to reach the place
on
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at
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correct
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the correct
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time
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.
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, an employee should leave their home 1 hour before
for
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to
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 reach office on
exact
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time
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.
Furthermore
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,
Individual
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Individuals
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 who is spending more hours in
traffic
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 jams suffer
due to
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 CO2 and emitting gas from other vehicles.
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Thus
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This
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 leads to serious medical issues. A survey conducted by google in 2018 says that
,
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 90% of employees have serious health-related issues because of
traffic
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 and long sitting in the cab.
On the other hand
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,
People
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 can avoid
this
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 issue without anyone's help. Stay away from
cities
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 and live in the countryside of the
cities
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. Leaving in
village
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the village
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 has
a
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apply
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myriad
benefits
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of benefits
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in
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for
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 personal and professional
life
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Firstly
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 they can spend quality
time
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 with their family.
This
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 can help your mind
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 and enjoyment to the
life
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 from the hectic work
life
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.
Secondly
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, They can get rid of
pollution
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such
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 as air,water and noise
pollution
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. They can feel fresh air and water.
In addition
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 to
this
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, Urban
area
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areas
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 is battled with overcrowded. To cite an example, a report published by
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time
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the time
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 of India in 2021, Most
of
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the
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apply
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metropolitan
cities
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 are overpopulated
of
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by
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 an extra 40%.
This
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 causes
imbalance
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an imbalance
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 in the region. So Government should encourage and motivate the
people
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 to live in rural areas. They should conduct some awareness programmes about the benefits of living in
village
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the village
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to
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for
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 the public.
To conclude
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, whether it
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pollution
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is pollution
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 or
traffic
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, we have some responsibility to
the
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society. from our
side
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,side
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 we should keep our society clean and tidy.
As a result
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next
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the next
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 generation can enjoy
the
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life
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 without any
pollution
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 or
traffic
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.
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