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The most effective way to solve traffic problems in the cities is to encourage people from suburbs or the countryside to live in the cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#traffic #cities #people #suburbs #countryside
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Over the past few decades,
traffic
 and
pollution
 is one of the biggest issues in the nation. It is a common public opinion that-, the correct solution,
of
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traffic
 is,
encourage
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people
 to stay away from
cities
 and live in rural areas. I vehemently agree with the statement. In the modern era,
people
 are wasting their valuable
time
 in
traffic
. If a person
need
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 to go somewhere, he or she
need
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 to leave home as earlier to reach the place
on
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at
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correct
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the correct
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time
.
For instance
, an employee should leave their home 1 hour before
for
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 reach office on
exact
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time
.
Furthermore
,
Individual
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Individuals
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 who is spending more hours in
traffic
 jams suffer
due to
 CO2 and emitting gas from other vehicles.
Thus
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 leads to serious medical issues. A survey conducted by google in 2018 says that
,
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 90% of employees have serious health-related issues because of
traffic
 and long sitting in the cab.
On the other hand
,
People
 can avoid
this
 issue without anyone's help. Stay away from
cities
 and live in the countryside of the
cities
. Leaving in
village
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 has
a
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myriad
benefits
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of benefits
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in
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 personal and professional
life
Firstly
 they can spend quality
time
 with their family.
This
 can help your mind
relaxed
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 and enjoyment to the
life
 from the hectic work
life
.
Secondly
, They can get rid of
pollution
such
 as air,water and noise
pollution
. They can feel fresh air and water.
In addition
 to
this
, Urban
area
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areas
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 is battled with overcrowded. To cite an example, a report published by
time
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the time
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 of India in 2021, Most
of
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the
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metropolitan
cities
 are overpopulated
of
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by
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 an extra 40%.
This
 causes
imbalance
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an imbalance
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 in the region. So Government should encourage and motivate the
people
 to live in rural areas. They should conduct some awareness programmes about the benefits of living in
village
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the village
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to
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 the public.
To conclude
, whether it
pollution
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is pollution
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 or
traffic
, we have some responsibility to
the
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society. from our
side
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,side
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 we should keep our society clean and tidy.
As a result
next
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the next
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 generation can enjoy
the
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life
 without any
pollution
 or
traffic
.
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