It is important to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. to what extend do you agree and disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

There is no denying that fostering
children
's understanding of right and wrong is an essential aspect of shaping their future personalities and character. In recent years, debates on the
punishment
of
children
have become increasingly emphasized. Some
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that
phisically
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physical
punishment
of
children
is the best way to
instill
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them
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good
behavior
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,
while
others argue that
children
should be brought up in nurturing and supportive environment. From my
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totally
dissagree
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disagree
that
physicall
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physical
punishment
is the best way to educate
children
, particularly at an early age. Some parents believe that
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beating
children
for their infractions it can allow
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avoid them
further
.
However
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it is actually not true, because that type of
punishment
leads to anxiety and have
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impact on
self-esteem
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the self-esteem
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and self-confidence of
children
and adolescent.
On the
contrary
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it can lead to
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of the rules and regulations altogether.
For
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as
practise
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shows
children
which
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grown
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up in loving
family
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families
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are more likely
succeed
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and
children
who
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with strict rules and were always
overpunished
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over punished
for minor mistakes have issues with social skills. First and foremost teachers and parents should consider
to use
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non-physical
punishment
such
as
as
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taking away privileges, setting clear boundaries and consequences, or having a conversation with
child
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the child
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to understand the reasons behind his
behavior
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behaviour
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. It is
also
important to consider seeking professional psychologist help if parents are feeling overwhelmed and unable to effectively discipline their child. In conclusion, undoubtedly it is essential to teach
children
good
behavior
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, in a
meantime
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it should be done in a proper way like depriving smartphones and computer games can be effective measures to punish
children
.
Instead
of physical
punishment
adults should focus on building healthy and friendly relationships with their
child
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children
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.
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