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Nowadays children spend more time on computer games rather than physical exercise. What reason behind this? Negative or positive?

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In recent days, computer
games
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 become more popular among our younger generations than physical
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. There are several reasons for it. I strongly feel that it has a negative impact on child development.
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 increased urbanization, many public playgrounds vanished and were converted into shopping malls and buildings.
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, with increased atrocities on children, their security becomes one of the main concerns,
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 parents not encouraging their loved ones to play outside, and
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 they are providing gadgets to spend their free
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, For elders, it becomes easy to provide virtual entertainment to kids rather than taking them out and playing physical
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 because of their hectic work life.
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 there are a few advantages to computer
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 as it improves problem-solving skills and challenging players with difficult stages. But, increased screen
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 causes detrimental effects on youth development. To illustrate, they cannot focus on their studies and careers so their performance in exams will be poor and score fewer marks,
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 they live more in the virtual world than in the real,
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 it causes more psychological problems. It
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 has an adverse impact on kids' eyes.
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, a study conducted in Canada reveals that youngers who spent more
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 on computer
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 struggle with physical and mental illness.
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, I believe digital activities causes negative effects on younger generations. So I strongly suggest parents take mitigating actions to reduce
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 on online
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 and encourage them to participate in physical activities
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 as cricket, football and other
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