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Around the 65% of the worlds population is an internet consumer. Did you know it? Give your opinion

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Did you know that around 65% of the world's population ispopulationhe population of the
word
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world
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 is an
internet
 consumer
?
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 Some
people
 dislike
internet
 use because they don’t think it is educational or useful, especially for the youth.
However
, the
internet
 is a good tool when used properly. Personally, I believe that the
internet
 plays a critical role in getting to know
about
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new information, skills and more.
For example
, when you don’t understand a topic explained in class, you can simply search it on google and it will show you a variety of explanations so you will for sure understand the topic. Years ago
this
 was impossible to imagine and knowledge was something that a reduced amount of
people
 had.
Moreover
, I think
people
 are now more connected than ever.
This
 is because of the chatting option, you can chat with individuals around the world, without having the problem of understanding each other, which is
due to
 translation tools. Before,
people
 had to write cards that took days or even months to arrive at their destination.
On the other hand
, there is fake news,
behaviours
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 like cyberbullying appeared with
this
 tool. In my opinion, we should control the bad use of the
internet
 as it can cause dangerous situations and psychological problems like depression or even suicide.
However
, it’s a problem that can be solved.
As a result
, the issue is not the
internet
 itself but the use the users give it. In conclusion, like everything, there are some good and bad aspects but I believe that the
internet
 is a practical, helpful and beneficial tool. And the problems that it has involved can be solved.
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