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Vandalism is a problem that has affected society for a long time. Does it continue now ? Give your opinion

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Vandalism
 is a problem that has affected society for a long time.
This
 behaviour involves damaging or destroying property without the owner’s consent. In my
opinion
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vandalism
 is an unacceptable behaviour that should be strongly condemned. Some people argue that
vandalism
 can be a form of protest against institutions.
However
,
while
 protesting is a fundamental right,
damaging
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the damaging
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 property is not an acceptable way of
expressing
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.
Moreover
,
vandalism
 is a harmful behaviour that negatively impacts communities.
Vandalism
also
 creates an atmosphere of anxiety, which can lead to increased crime and violence.
On the other hand
,
vandalism
 is a form of self-expression.
Graffitti
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Graffiti
 and street art,
in particular
, are viewed as legitimate forms of art that should be appreciated. In conclusion,
while
vandalism
 can be viewed as a form of self-expression, it damages communities with destructive consequences. In my point of view, individuals should find more constructive ways of expressing their frustrations and grievances.
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