The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009.
The table represents the percentages of secondary school
students
attending 4 different kinds of secondary
schools
between 2000 and 2009.
Overall
, the highest percentage of pupils attending a type of secondary school was in 2009, 58% of
students
attended community
schools
.
On the other hand
, the lowest was
also
in 2009, which was 10% of secondary
students
in specialist institutes. First of all, attendance at specialist
schools
didn't change much throughout the years 2000, 2005, and 2009, it was 12%, 11%, and 10% respectively.
However
, community
schools
' attendance changed a lot, from 12% in 2000 to 58% in 2009. In terms of grammar
schools
,
students
' attendance decreased between the years 2000 and 2009. In 2000 it was 24%,
whereas
in 2009 it went down to half of that.
Lastly
, voluntary-controlled
schools
were generally the most attended
schools
in comparison with the others. Half of the
students
in 2000 attended voluntary-controlled
schools
, but it
then
dropped to 38% in 2005 and 20% in 2009.
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