The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009.

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The table represents the percentages of secondary school

students

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attending 4 different kinds of secondary

schools

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between 2000 and 2009.

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, the highest percentage of pupils attending a type of secondary school was in 2009, 58% of

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attended community

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, the lowest was

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in 2009, which was 10% of secondary

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in specialist institutes. First of all, attendance at specialist

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didn't change much throughout the years 2000, 2005, and 2009, it was 12%, 11%, and 10% respectively.

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, community

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' attendance changed a lot, from 12% in 2000 to 58% in 2009. In terms of grammar

schools

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students

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' attendance decreased between the years 2000 and 2009. In 2000 it was 24%,

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in 2009 it went down to half of that.

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, voluntary-controlled

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were generally the most attended

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in comparison with the others. Half of the

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in 2000 attended voluntary-controlled

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, but it

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dropped to 38% in 2005 and 20% in 2009.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009.

Developing countries require help offered by international organizations to ensure healthy and sustainable development. Some people think that financial aid is important. Others believe that practical aid and advice are more important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays many students are participating in international exchange trips. Is this a positive or a negative development?

Some people believe that school education should be focused on academic subjects, which are good for childiren's future, and subjects like music and sports are useless. In my opinion, subjects such as music and sports are useful and effictive for spirtual and physical development for children.

Many developed countries are giving financial aid to poor countries. However, this hasn’t solved the problem of poverty in these nations and so other types of help are needed. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

Poor infrastructure hinders under-developed countries from progressing and modernising. Some people think that this should be the first problem tackled by foreign aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?