The maps below show how a coastal town developed between 1950 and 2007.

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landscape of a coastal

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in 1950 and its development after 57 years.

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, there are major changes happened in the coastal area over a 5

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. The coastal

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's west and

east

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side was mostly surrounded by

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in 1950.

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this

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was changed in 2007, wherein commercial businesses

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cinema

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and shops were erected. Houses were

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built on the southeastern portion of the

town

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and small driveways were constructed. In 1950, the car park was located

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the southeastern side and transferred to the left outermost part of the field in 2007. In the same way, a swimming pool was added and a multi-storey car park was built. After 50 years, rental apartments were established on the northern side of the

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proper and an additional marina port was formed for docking

yacht

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The maps below show how a coastal town developed between 1950 and 2007.

Most countries aim to improve their standard of living through economis development,but many important social values can be lost as a result . Do the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages ?

Many people nowadays spend a large of their free time using a smartphone. What do you think are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Social interaction between people is destroyed by technology. Do you agree or disagree.