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Do the advantages of the government spending their money on college and university fees for students outweigh the disadvantages?

#government #money #college #university #fees #students
Some
people
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 say that if we let
children
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decide
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choices
 of every detail
such
 as what to wear or food and clothes will make a society that
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 preferences and wishes ,
whereas
 other believe it is
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 idea for
children
 to make their own choices.In my opinion, I strongly believe that
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.In
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To Begin
,
children
 nowadays are
intellegent
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intelligent
 because of the new technology ,and
some time
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 they are smarter than their parents.
For example
,
children
 have more fashion sense and they can dress better than older
people
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additionally
, they are well known
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 entertainment and have their own ways like playing video games ,
while
 older
people
 prefer to
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 a book .firthermore,
although
children
 prefer sweet and fast food ,older
people
 are more into healthy food.So
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 are big differences between generations ,and
everyone
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 of them
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 his pest
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entrance
intense
,and no one should
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interfere
 with other preferences.
However
, other
people
 say if we give freedom to
children
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interference
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 like their parents
this
 can make a society of selfish individuals who think about themselves
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caring
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 others. for
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, a group of
children
 who are raised on taking
thier
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their
 own choice ,but when they grow older they address
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reprobate
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without
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caring
carrying
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traditions
 or religions.,
To conclude
, as
children
 are born in a different
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, they know about their time better than
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,so they know what
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ON
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other hand
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, it s true some
people
 think
this
 is wrong and
children
 should be guided ,but
this
 will may make many
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 in
children
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 lives since parents are not
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familiar
 with the new
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role
 of
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modern
socites
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societies
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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