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Many Countries today are experiencing high levels of migration from rural areas to cities. What are the causes of this trend, and what effects does it have on the existing city dwellers?

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In the present day,many nations have problems with
people
 who live in the countryside moving to the
town
 area.
This
 essay will discuss why some
people
 move into the
town
 and the impact on local residents.
First,
the biggest reason that many
people
 move to the
town
 is
jobs
 because in big
cities
 they can find a lot of
jobs
 they want that in the big towns have many companies and many types of work but in their hometowns do not have
jobs
 there prefer and has only a few
jobs
such
 as work in the farm.
Second,
education some students go to
cities
 because of the education and they believe that studying in the big
cities
 is better than in small towns because there have more information and advances technological than in schools in their hometown.
In addition
, in many
cities
 that have a lot of
people
 migrating are many problems
such
 as homeless and crime.
For example
, many
people
 who come to the
town
 can make residences more expensive and some
people
 can not pay the bill for the house ,so the number of
people
 who did not have a house is increasing every year.
Also
, someone can not find
jobs
 no money.
To sum up
, I think everyone much to think about the problem and the government much to help
people
 in
the
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 and develop education in their hometown or help
people
 to play their residences.
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