Children are experiencing increasing educational, social and commercial pressures. What are the causes? What measures do you think can be taken to reduce them?

It is true that
use
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the use
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of
cars
and motorcycles cause transportation difficulty in cities.
While
this
is a serious problem, it can be solved by changing public
transports
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. The reasons, I believe , are clear . The main reason makes workers
lazy
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to use public transport and
not
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enough
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have enough
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time.
Cars
and motors run faster than bicycles and
bus
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buses
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. It can go as you want.
Cars
and motors are
high value
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property
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so citizens buy
it
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to prove rich. It runs too fast and saves time.
Besides
, Fuel costs are not too high. Research shows that with today's average income, people can own a car and easily buy a motorbike.
Nevertheless
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i
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think that the Government must encourage people to take public transport and cycling to work improves health.
Along with
that, open more public transport fee incentives.The manager should open more public bus routes.
For example
,in my country, Vietnam's Government
discount
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discounts
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bus tickets and high taxes
petrol
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and
cars
.
To sum up
,
it is clear that
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the use
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of
cars
and motorcycles cause transportation difficulty in cities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pressures
  • Stress
  • Competition
  • Expectations
  • Peer influence
  • Technology
  • Media
  • Standardization
  • Balanced lifestyle
  • Extracurriculars
  • Education reform
  • Financial support
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