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Nowadays, various types of crimes are done by youngsters all over the world and that have increased significantly. In this essay, I will discuss the Issues of why youngsters are interested to do crimes and give them appropriate solutions to this problem.

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It is not uncommon to hear the complaint that youth created a variety of
crimes
 around the world and have improved strongly. The factors responsible for the problem and feasible solutions
accordingly
 will be analyzed in
this
 report. The main reason is that
teenagers
 do not be educated well in school and at home.
In other words
, they must lose their education
that
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because
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 they do not have the awareness of controlling their behaviours. Maybe they do not have a rich family and support them to go to school so
that
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the
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 youth want to get money or kill time by doing
crimes
.
In addition
, It is necessary for
parents
 to focus on their children's
feeling
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feelings
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. Family members are too busy to teach them the bad influence of
crimes
 and accompany their children
causes
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causing
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 youngsters
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to have
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have
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apply
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to get attention from their
parents
through
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by
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 doing
crimes
. Another is called imitating, when
teenagers
 touch too
much
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many
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 things about violence and
crimes
, they must have excitement to imitate the same behaviour and show their power and ability.
Finally
,
the
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curiosity
need
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needs
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 to be one of
reasons
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the reasons
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 why youngsters are interested in doing
crimes
. They are naive and can not judge the problems and just follow their hearts.
However
, there are various steps
could
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that could
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 tackle
these problem
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this problem
these problems
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. First and foremost, governments should regulate
the
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apply
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strong laws to
limited
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limit
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teenagers
' behaviour. Amending some punishments,
such
 as prison, money and the most important thing is letting them
to
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apply
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be educated under their supervision.
Besides
, banning violent things, like films, books, TV shows and so on.
Finally
,
parents
 should spend time
to accompany
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accompanying
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 their kids
teach
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and teach
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 them what need to do and what things are not
be
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apply
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allowed. It must benefit
to
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apply
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their children to improve their life. In conclusion, governments and
parents
 could certainly implement a range of measures to reduce the
interests
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interest
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 of
teenagers
 to do
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the crime
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crime
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crimes
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.
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