Some people believe that celebrities have a positive effect on society, while others think that their effect is harmful and negative. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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people
think that their effect is dangerous. In my opinion, I agree with both ideas about positive and negative
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celebrities
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some children can have a great role model
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the actress.
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, many countries use the
celebrities
like football payer, singer and others to communicate with students and shows them how to succeed in their life. So, I believe that famous
people
can teach most students in the right
ways
if they a good folk and students will follow them.
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many nations are crazy about popular
people
like music branches and sports teams so,
celebrities
are very effective in many
ways
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therefore
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dream to be superstars in the future because they think can earn a lot of money for the job.
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celebrities
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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