People tend to work longer hours nowadays. Working long hours has a negative effect on themselves, their families and society, so working hours should be restricted. Do you agree or disagree?
Residents are likely to work overtime at
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that
causes several adverse issues with individuals, their households and relatives, and the social community. Correct pronoun usage
which
Therefore
, the limitation to curb the amount of working time is extremely vital.
The reasons why I suppose that working overtime should be controlled strictly are the repulsive impacts on each inhabitant. Linking Words
Firstly
, it is undeniable that citizens working non-stop would face up with various diseases. Particularly, sitting in front of Linking Words
the
digital screen for hours make their eye retina become exhausted and weak Correct article usage
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in some serious cases, it may lead to visual impairments. Correct word choice
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Furthermore
, working in wrong standing or sitting poses leads to spinal diseases which are extremely demanding and complicated to relieve. Linking Words
Moreover
, working for unconfined time is Linking Words
also
the reason for a range of mental health troubles; Linking Words
for instance
, stress, anxiety disorders, or depression. Linking Words
Therefore
, productivity will sink sharply.
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their health, working for long hours make a lot of horrible and risky effects Change preposition
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also
on family relations and Linking Words
overall
society. First of all, devoting too much time to earning money Linking Words
instead
of bridging the gap between parents and their children weakens the bonds between family members. Linking Words
In addition
, Linking Words
offsprings
who were not educated in a true way will develop unwanted and violent Fix the agreement mistake
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behaviors
and make mortally or distraught decisions. Change the spelling
behaviours
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, the aged population because Linking Words
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postponing marriage is a typical and undeniable influence of unrestricted working in a lot of nations Change preposition
apply
such
as Japan in which city dwellers tend to refuse to get married even though their government strives for making laws and policies to encourage childbearing.
In conclusion, working constantly for hours without sufficient rest not only harms personal health but Linking Words
also
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such
noticeable and controversial disadvantages for household and society that should be confined as soon as possible.Linking Words
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