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Some people think that we should divide students based on their academic ability, while others think we should educate all students together. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#people #students #ability
There are two different ideas of educating
students
, one thinks that we should educate the
students
 base on their ability, but the other
think
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 that we should teach them together. I believe that
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 all
students
 together has more benefits outweigh than
ecducate
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educate
educated
sepratly
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separately
. In my experience, It is important to learn with peers and have group
discuession
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discussion
discussions
 during
the
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school,
whereas
 though it will be hard for
a
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 educator to teach learners individually
with
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 their abilities, it is better for
students
 to understand that everyone has different capabilities for learning.
For instance
, a student may not good at reading articles, but he/she might be gifted
for
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 drawing or speaking and he/she can be able to express himself/herself well
by
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 pictures.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 important to have all kinds of
students
 learning together, and they can recognise
themselves
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how good they are. Even though everyone has
weakness
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 parts,
students
 will be able to teach each other and learn things from others.
Therefore
, the period of
discuession
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discussion
 in a group is
also
 the time for
students
 to develop
the
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social skills.
In contrast
, people who learn
by
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 their own
acadimic
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academic
 individually, it may
hard
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 for
them
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to
ecperience
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experience
the
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group learning and will miss the
oppertunity
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opportunity
 to get
along with
 others. In conclusion, I
think
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educate
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students
 together can build up their social skills and have relationships with others which helps them experience that everyone has
different
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ability
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abilities
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 so they will be more
confidence
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confident
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 to be themselves.
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