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SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT CHILDREN SHOULD ONLY READ ACADEMIC BOOKS. OTHERS BELIEVE THAT READING BOOKS FOR PLEASURE IS EQUALLY IMPORTANT. DISCUSS BOTH THESE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

#people #children #books #pleasure
Children
's development is a major concern in our society and
currently
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 people are arguing about whether
children
 should only read academic
books
 or not.
Although
 I agree with reading academic
books
 is paramount important I believe that reading other
types
 of
books
 for pleasure is equally important. Regarding the benefits of reading
books
 for academic purposes, the most significant one is that young people are able to focus on learning the knowledge
that is
 related to their school assessments and examinations by studying academic
books
. Academic
books
 usually show important and useful information and let people learn in an organized and quick way.
For instance
, in order to learn a foreign
language
 like English starting from zero, most of us will choose to learn grammar and vocabulary through reading academic
books
 as the information printed in academic
books
 is usually more accurate and printed in a systematic way. There is no doubt that
children
 are able to learn new and accurate knowledge from the
books
 that are prepared by the schools effectively and the
books
also
 favour them to handle the current exam-orientated educational system.
However
, never should we overlook the importance of reading
books
 for pleasure. Despite reading academic
books
, reading different
types
 of
books
also
 bring a multitude of positive effects on
children
. Take learning a foreign
language
 as an example,
children
 could
also
 learn it from reading others
books
such
 as novels and fiction which are written in a foreign
language
. Novels and fictions are usually more interesting as they include fascinating storylines
while
 academic
books
 are usually boring. If
children
 could only read academic
books
 in learning a new foreign
language
, they would easily lose their interest and motivation in learning. Allowing
children
 to pick different kinds of
books
 to read can maintain their motivation in learning in long term.
Besides
,
children
's development should be all-rounded
instead
 of focusing on the academic aspects only. Reading various
types
 of
books
 allows them to learn and grow in different aspects.
For example
, when some
children
 are stressed from schoolwork, reading
books
 like " The chicken soup for the soul" can inspire them and bring them some positive energy which is good for their mental health. They are able to learn to face difficulties in life with a positive attitude. Under
this
 line of thinking, despite reading academic
books
is
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 important, I still believe that students should read other
types
 of
books
 at the same time as they could
also
 bring different positive effects on
children
's development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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