The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
The graph gives
the
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information about how many
people
visited a
Carribean
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Caribbean
island
for their holiday between 2010 and 2017.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the number of total
visitors
of
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to
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the
island
were
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gradually increased in the given period of time.
Also
, the
people
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number of people
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who visited
a
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an
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island
with
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on
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cruise
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a cruise
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ship
tour
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tours
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drastically rose. In 2010, tourists who stayed on
island
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the island
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were
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0.5
million
, and a year later remained
same
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the same
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.
On the contrary
,
cruise
ship
tourists
were
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slightly doubled, 0.25 to 0.5
million
in the same timeframe.
Next,
between 2011 and 2013, tourists
enjoyed
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enjoying
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their vacation on
island
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the island
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increased
about
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by about
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0.5
million
to 1.5
million
and there were no
further
number
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numbers
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changed
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from 2013 to 2015.
However
, in
case
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the case
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of
cruise
ship
visitors
there was
slightly
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a slightly
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dropped in 1 year
during
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between
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2011 and 2012, the figures were 0.5
million
to almost 0.25
million
. But after 2012, more
people
enjoyed their holiday with
cruise
ships, it ended up to 1.25
million
in 2015. From 2015 to 2017,
visitors
stayed
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staying
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on
island
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the island
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started to drop but
slighlty
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slightly
increased again in 2017,
about
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from about
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1.25
million
to 1.5
million
.
Cruise
ship
visitors
,
in contrast
, continuously increased and 2
million
people
booked
cruise
trip
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trips
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in 2017.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, island, visitors, cruise, ship, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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