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Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children grow up with wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree whit this option?

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In a globalised world, there has been a variety of family issues
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 in
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 standard of living in many nations around the globe. It is commonly believed that children born
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 are capable of coping with certain matters when they become mature,
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, those who are given birth by
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 are prone to face hardships. I disagree with the notion mentioned because it relatively depends on their situations.
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, those who are raised by wealthy parents may be disciplined and fostered in a positive way. To put it simply, if they have a lot more opportunities to make particular mistakes, they will gain a better understanding of
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, young teenagers who are born rich,
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, are likely to be successful in their
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 the assistance of their
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relatives
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, it cannot be
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 that youngsters nurtured differently are capable of dealing with difficulties.
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 it is considered that most obnoxious children seem to tackle
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personal matters well, they might not manage with their
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 requirements in life
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 the reason why those who are born in well-prepared
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 may lead
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 achievable life in the future.
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, many of my friends are likely to engage with their great
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 owing to their family backup. In conclusion, there has been an argument about whether kids who are born in run-down conditions would be good at managing their struggles in life or not.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • affluent
  • resilience
  • problem-solving skills
  • ingenuity
  • adaptability
  • wealth disparity
  • work ethic
  • diligence
  • responsibility
  • upward mobility
  • extracurricular activities
  • psychological impact
  • insecurities
  • sense of entitlement
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