Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children grow up with wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree whit this option?

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Younger ones born in poor families are likely to dominate life compared to the ones growing up with wealth because they do not have the foundation or the wisdom of a poor one. We can easily agree to the reason by identifying two children who have the same qualities and characters but with different fortune backgrounds. Looking at the child with fortune seems to have no pressure and seems easy-going but the child less fortunate has a weight on the shoulders to carry through hardships to keep their family on the edge or even higher. 'Wisdom comes from experience' and my suggestion right now looking at the above instance would be the one with 'understanding' is dominant. For the rich, it is not hard but just a matter of using power or wealth to get to their goal in just two steps but for the ,opposite it is twenty steps or even more because they have to go through infant steps from crawling to walking and running. The above instance is faced by whoever at adolescent age a lot. Because it is when they understand how the world works and their goals. For both the fortunate and the less fortunate it is a matter of time and space. Experience develops largely from failures and setbacks which is for the one with little support but for those who have higher power and are with no experience.

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my suggestion is children who are brought up with parents who do not have wealth are better organised and experienced with knowledge rather than the rich. It is again I would suggest a matter of time and space which gives more value to intelligence.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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wealth disparity
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Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children grow up with wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree whit this option?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this .

The best way to reduce poverty in developing countries is by giving up to six years of free education, so that they can at least read, write and use numbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As children become adults, their social behaviour changes in some ways. What are the main differences between young children’s social behaviour and that of adults? To what extent are the changes that take place good?

Some people think that parents should give their children complete freedom. Others feel that parents should limit their children’s freedom. Discuss both views and give your opinion.