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Taking a year of between finishing school and starting university is a waste of students' time to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#year #school #university #waste #students #time
Some people say that one year apart between from graduating
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school
 and accepting to university
just
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 a
spending
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 pupil's time. I mostly agree with
this
 opinion, but
particulary
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particularly
 it depends on
person
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 and how
this
 student can
addapt
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adapt
for
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 new changings.
Basicly
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Basically
, after more than 10 years studying at
school
, some
of
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pupils
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 need a rest in their
live
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 to be ready for
new
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a new
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 place and to be more
invided
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invited
to
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 education for their
chosed
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chosen
professtion
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profession
. On top of that, after taking 1 year period for nothing, students can feel morally heavy inside. Just a
month
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 holiday can distract students from education,
in
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particularly
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 in
1 year
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person
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a person
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 can forget everything that they had taken from
school
 education if they will not use it in their next several years. But
on the other hand
, in
this
 12 month apart
person
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people
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 can do
everyhting
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everything
 that they wanted, but could not do in their high
school
 time which
is
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took their whole time.
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, sewing clothes,
learn
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 to play
in
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the
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 instrument and
another physical activities
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.
Last
 but not least, all of us have
their
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 opinion and going to the rest or
go
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 straight away to university
it
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is your choice and no one can stop you from
something
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doing something
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 that you wanna do.
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