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People now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is true that individuals nowadays have more opportunities to travel across the
world
 than it was before mainly
due to
 the technological development in many fields, in
this
 essay I will discuss the perceived benefits and drawbacks of these opportunities and provide evidence as to why it has far more significant advantages. The main benefit is that
this
 freedom to go anywhere gives
people
 the chance to explore the
world
 and experience what is like to work and live in a different country, individuals who are away from their family and environment get challenged to first of all, adapt to the new environment and the rules of
this
 country, and
secondly
, to make new friendships and relationships which can be interesting.
Moreover
, they will get to discover a new culture, new music ..etc, which will eventually make them open-minded and give them a better understanding of the
world
. I totally agree with
this
, I believe that most
people
 should at least once try and live in a foreign country. Despite the obvious appeal, it has certain drawbacks, not everyone in the
world
 gets to do
this
, in fact, only citizens of developed countries and some from developing countries with privileged backgrounds can travel all over the
world
 and most
people
 don't have the resources to do
this
, so
it is clear that
 most of the
world
 doesn't benefit from
this
 technological development in these particular fields,
in addition
, some
people
 claim that
instead
 of wasting money on trips, we should donate and help
people
 in poorer countries, so clearly it does have some significant disadvantages.
To conclude
,
it is clear that
 there are positive and negative aspects of
this
 development;
however
, I believe that the advantages do in fact outweigh the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication technology
  • transportation
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • freedom
  • work and live
  • development
  • increased job opportunities
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • cultural exposure
  • diversity
  • economic growth
  • globalization
  • social isolation
  • loneliness
  • loss of community
  • sense of belonging
  • expensive cost of living
  • housing
  • strain on infrastructure
  • resources
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