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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue?

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 of the most serious issues that the world is facing is global warming
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 The
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following
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 essay will explain what are the reasons for global warming and
suggests
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 some possible measures that governments and
individual
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individuals
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take
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 to handle
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 problem. There are several reasons that cause global warming. First and foremost is
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 is the establishment of many
industries
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 in developed and developing countries.
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,
industries
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 emit large amounts of polluted gas into the environment
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such
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 as
co2
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, nitrogen, carbon monoxide and many more. These gases make the
earth
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 warmer than ever before.
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, as per a recent
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analysis
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Industries
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 emit a huge amount of polluted gases. Another major reason is that Individuals prefer private transport
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 of public transport. Vehicles emit high volumes of carbon gases. Global warming can be reduced effectively
If
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 the government and individuals work together
hand
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. The first measure that should be taken by the state imposes strict policies on
Industries
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.
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 of the measures can look like the government
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 to verify the emission level of
industries
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 from time to time. Another measure can be planting more trees surrounding the
industries
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this
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 is highly recommended by many researchers. Like the state, people take
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apply
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seriously and maximise the usage of public transportation.
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, society can habituate public transport in their commute. In order to encourage public
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transportation,
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 the state should
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 provide adequate facilities and subsidy rates to people.
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, until and unless every nation and people
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understand the seriousness of the issue and work together
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 it is difficult to reduce the global warming effect on the earth.

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structure
Plan your essay with clear parts: an intro, 2 or 3 body parts, and a conclusion. Say what you will talk about in the intro.
structure
Each paragraph has one main idea. Start with a small line that tells the reader the idea of the paragraph.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like and, also, but, so to help flow.
grammar
Watch your grammar and spelling. Use CO2, polluted, analysis, and other common words in a simple, right form.
content
Give more facts or clear examples. Explain how the ideas can work in real life.
vocabulary
Keep to simple words. Do not use hard or long words that may make the writing hard to read.
content
The essay tries to cover both causes and ways to act.
cohesion
The writer uses some linking words to show cause and effect.
task
There is a clear attempt to answer the task with a plan.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • global issue
  • severity
  • urgency
  • greenhouse effect
  • human-induced
  • deforestation
  • fossil fuel combustion
  • industrial pollution
  • environmental regulations
  • emission standards
  • renewable energy sources
  • green technologies
  • international cooperation
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • energy consumption
  • public transportation
  • recycling
  • eco-friendly
  • extreme weather conditions
  • biodiversity
  • economic stability
  • collective responsibility
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