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In their advertising businesses nowadays usually emphasize that their products are new in some way

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Compared with the past,
Due to
 the number of
products
 and the variety of the same
products
 advertising methods have dramatically changed all over the world. These days,
companies
 emphasize their
products
 are new. In my opinion, the positive points of
this
 method are more than the negative ones.
Firstly
, the most successful key to advertising and making
people
 buy is presenting new things
such
 as presenting English class which is held by new methods of teaching or producing mobile phones which have a new feature that causes keeping a battery for three days. These days, not
also
 we have many
products
 but
also
 many varieties of each product which means if a new
company
 wants to enter a specific area
such
 as personal computers and make a new product, many
companies
 already did it.
As a result
, if
people
 want to buy a PC, they buy from a known
company
such
 as hp because these
companies
 are old and
people
 have trust. So, you have to compete with these old
companies
, you don't have any option, except to produce new
products
, methods, or features to make
people
 know you and trust you and buy from your
company
.
Secondly
, a
company
 should create a need among
people
, which means an advertiser is searching for what things are lacking in
people
's lives and if
people
 have it, their life is easier than before.
Therefore
, a
company
 has to create something new to show
people
 that
this
 product makes you comfortable, happy, and better life.
However
, making a new idea and building
people
's trust is difficult for a new
company
.
For example
, you want to open a new
company
 which produces sports kits and you know many
companies
 already did it. So you have to present something new
such
 as the quality of the kits or the looks of the kits. In conclusion, making a new method is necessary to sell.
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