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Computer have changed the way people study. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using computers as study aids?

#computer #people #study #computers #aids
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Nowadays, computers are becoming increasingly popular for study than before
due to
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enhancement
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 in technology. There are some pros and cons of using laptops for learning purposes. There are so many benefits of using the vast paced technology like computers to learn something new rather than using pen and paper.
One
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 of them is
time saving
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, the
one
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 can save
their
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apply
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time
while
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 studying online,
as
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in terms of
writing
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the writing
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test
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, a learner can do their task effectively by using
keyboard
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the keyboard
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 which is
really
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 useful form
of
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tool
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the tool
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 when writing rather than
traditional
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the traditional
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 style of writing. Another
one
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 is having more interest during education with the aid of today's technology, as from books, students may not focus properly when they learn as compared to
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a laptop
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laptop
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laptops
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. Because these screens have more visual content
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 of theoretical. The first drawback of sitting in front of these monitors is health issues. Since students use
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this device
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these devices
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 more often to fulfil their goals
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 they forget to take breaks in between which
further
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lead
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leads
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 to many diseases
such
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 as obesity, loss of eyesight and many more which
is
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 very dangerous for them in future. The second
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 is
lack
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 of interaction between classmates, as they are not making more friends when they are completing their assignments.
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, they feel alone, and they might go into depression in future. In conclusion, there are advantages and disadvantages of studying with the help of
computer
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a computer
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 but as everyone
know
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 that studying from books is
also
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a
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 initiative step.
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