The diagram below gives information about the number of parcels delivered by two major mail services companies from 1920 to 2000.
The given linear graph
illustrate
Change the verb form
illustrates
amount
of package delivered by Federal Express and TNT mail services during 80 years period.
Add an article
the amount
overall
, distribution
of parcel Correct article usage
the distribution
were
gradually increased by TNT Change the verb form
was
while
number
of that of Federal Express had Change the article
a number
the number
lot
of fluctuations.
In 1920, 15000 of Change the article
a lot
majority
Correct article usage
the majority
delivered
by Federal Express and increased Add a missing verb
were delivered
markly
up to about 23000 until 1940 and Correct your spelling
markedly
then
drastically droped
during 10 years Correct your spelling
dropped
of
period. Change preposition
apply
Further
reduced till 1960 and began to rise up in little
bit of slow manner. That trend Add an article
a little
was
changed again when Unnecessary verb
apply
amount
started to go down marginally Correct article usage
the amount
1980
to 2000.
Change preposition
from 1980
On the other hand
, distributing
of Replace the word
distribution
Add an article
the parcel
a parcel
parcel
by TNT Fix the agreement mistake
parcels
was
marginally climbed Unnecessary verb
apply
up
until 1980 with some fluctuation and Change preposition
apply
sour
up to 27500 in 1990.
Even the federal Federal Express was the major delivery service in 1920 that trend Wrong verb form
soured
was
changed and ENT became the number one by 2000.Unnecessary verb
apply
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Vocabulary: The word "express" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "marginally" was used 2 times.
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