Doctors recommend that older people should exercise regularly. However, many of them do Not exercise enough. What are the causes? What can be done to encourage them to exercise?

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older
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. Staying physically fit is
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elderly
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advice. In
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fit
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age
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obesity is the majority of
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one place or irregular eating habits brings
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bed or spending their whole day staying in one place without having workouts became a problem
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healthy
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.
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older
people
less active.
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people
who did not attend any
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activity when they were young became weaker in their older
age
.
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who use to do athletics or aerobics
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their
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’ The possible effects I can show them
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diet and
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of knowledge of
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food.
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value of foods, vitamins
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workouts.
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workout
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must begin
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age
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it
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even in older
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like walking. In
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thing the elders must show their much concern about it
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • motivation
  • physical limitations
  • lack of time
  • fear of injury
  • exercise facilities
  • misunderstanding
  • benefits of exercise
  • social support
  • poor health conditions
  • awareness
  • appropriate exercises
  • guidance
  • financial constraints
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