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The efficientfunctioning o f society is based on rules and laws. Society would not function well if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#f #society #rules #laws #function #individuals
We consider the issue, which is that some countries build special
sport
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 facilities for achieving
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better results from the local top athletes. In
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 case,
the
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ordinary people lose
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 possibility that everyone can attend kind of places. On the one hand, it is a great opportunity for sportsmen. They’ll be able to train without amateurs. In
this
 way, they’ll receive facilities for a privet workout. Kind of
trainings
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 will allow reaching them
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more success. Of course,
this
 point will bring benefits to the nation and the state.
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, if any country participates in the Olympics or other different international games,
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status on the world scene depend on it.
Therefore
 countries come up with a suggestion that they need to do whatever for the preparation.
On the other hand
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 folk can’t afford
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such
 objects. It means that level of the humanity’s health will decrease. As an example, let’s consider a teenager’s situation. If some countries will reduce places free attending,
this
 way will be able to bring youth to
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 self-destructive lifestyle,
such
 as alcohol or drugs. It means that in
this
case
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 young people won’t know how
spend
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 their free time. Unfortunately, mostly there are really
expansive
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expensive
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 facilities for
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 of pastime.
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consider
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, I would like to express my humble opinion.
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 negative development
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 because there are a lot of locations where athletes could prepare themselves for competitions. Absolutely, it is not necessary to reduce amateurs’ workout areas or close
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access to the new buildings.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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