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When talking about success, we often think of people who are rich or famous. In your opinion, what are the qualities that characterise a successful person? Why do you think these should be the criteria?

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It is believed, that to be popular and wealthy equal successful,
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, I consider it to be more about personal
characteristics
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 as confidence,
ambitiousness
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 and willingness to get new knowledge and learn from your mistakes. Obtaining
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 qualities inevitably leads to feeling fulfilment and happiness,
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 getting you motivated to pursue your goals. The most obvious for society indication of success is measured by the amount of money they make and recognition, obviously,
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 is a considerable part,
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, what people do not see is the personal qualities which are essential to be known as a successful person.
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 confidence, usually, it is the most important characteristic because even if
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 is the smartest individual without good self-esteem it is impossible for
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 to use all opportunities that
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 might have.
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 ambitiousness gives a perspective of how
one
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 imagines their
life
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, which helps to create short-term and long-term goals.
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, it is worth mentioning that
life
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 path could not be without it up and downs, and the
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 could be discouraging,
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 and probably the most important quality will be a willingness to learn from mistakes, which not only will make individual stronger but will help to adapt to a different situation. I consider
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characteristics
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 so important in achieving successful
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 because
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 they will not only help to create a well-paid career but
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 give a deeper understanding of what success is about for a person. For some it will be a happy family , for another opportunity to travel around the world, there is no standard answer, and developing
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characteristics
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 in yourself will improve your quality of
life
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 and create fulfilment which is necessary for living a happy
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, which is the biggest successes
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's can obtain. On balance, the abovementioned
characteristics
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 are the basis to become successful, they will not only help to achieve goals and become recognisable but
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 will lead to a deeper understanding of what success is all about for an individual.

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