Nowadays in many countries young people do not communicate with older people as much as they used to. Why is this happening? How could this situation be improved?

These days, the young do not
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with
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older
people
sufficiently in most
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nations
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the nations
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. I believe
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case is related
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the
generation
gap,
rapid
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changes in technologies. These flaws can be fixed by fair understanding, integration of
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to the novelties and empathy. The first cause of
this
situation is
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a shortening
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of
generation
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gap in the
last
decades. Before the millennium, young
people
was
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communicating
older
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with older
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people
better than the recent years because both
group’s
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had common pleasures and interests
due to
rare breakthroughs in these eras. Now, almost every year, considerable inventions for
people
have happened and every
generation
has formed around these novelties and their habits and behaviours have
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influenced them too.
For instance
, the young and the elder was enjoy
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playing backgammon in the past, today, 7 years old
kid
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kids
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cannot understand 10
years
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year
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old
kid’s
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habits and pleasures. To overcome these issue, empathy and understanding
is
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necessary. Both generations should esteem each other’s tendencies and habits.
Therefore
, their
communication
and common interests would be improved. The second cause of
this
case is speedy changes in technologies.
Due to
this
fact, the
olds
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could not integrate themselves
to
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new
communication
systems. They usually have missed new trends,
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approach
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of
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speech and
communication
and new media sources.
Therefore
, the young could not find
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them
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with them
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as
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worthwhile. To ratify
this
problem, the old should open to the renovations of
communication
and news sources. They should avoid
to
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being arrogant
to
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about
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young
people
’s interests and
topic
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topics
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. In short, they should catch every new era.
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, their
communication
would be better than
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past. In conclusion,
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and solutions of the case can be multiplied. Solutions
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this
issue are obvious and both groups have different responsibilities. They should solve
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showing some empathy and regard
otherwise
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would extend.
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