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Some people believe that using taxpayer funds to look for life on other planets is important. Others, however, think that it is a waste of public money because there are much more important issues requiring funding on or own planet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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some people that taxpayer
funds
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 should be used for exploring the other
planets
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,
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 others assert that earth has more significant problems to be solved with these
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 in comparison to investing them
to
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 other
planets
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. Creating new taxes to utilize
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 discoveries may give considerable benefits in the long
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. Looking
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 case from the other side, there are many immediate problems
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 our planet to be handled and spending these
funds
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for
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 these
issues
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 is more reasonable. On the one hand, it may be beneficial for
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 that governments may claim taxpayers from
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the citizen
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citizen
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citizens
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 for
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 investments. Even though
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this
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 action seems unreasonable and unnecessary
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these days, its acquisitions would probably
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 its expenditures in the future in sight of scientists.
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resource
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resources
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compound
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 can be explored much easier with these taxes and
scientist
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scientists
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 can utilize these inventions to improve better technologies
more
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rapid
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 ways.
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, gathering taxpayer
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 for exploring
planets
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 may open ways to live
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 better technologies.
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earth
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the earth
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 has been suffering from many
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, investing
for
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 other
planets
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 with taxpayers is unreasonable. World’s climate and ecosystem balance is broken down
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 fifty years and it would be better
that
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 governments show their
interests
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to
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 these
issues
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 first. To illustrate that, they can invest money to improve agriculture and
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fix environmental pollution. People cannot ratify these cases without help and in these
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 they have no interest
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the
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explorations
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exploration
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. In short, recovering these
issues
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 is more important than spending revenues
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. In conclusion causes and examples can be multiplied with
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 recruiting taxpayers for new orbits’ investments provides effective results in the future, in my opinion, our planet’s
issues
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 have been more important than others
due to
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 climate change and pollution.

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