Some people think that competitive sports have a positive effect on the education of teenagers while others argue that the effect is negative. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Youngsters playing sports can be good for their future and for their health. sport competition
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studying is not affected schooling but others think it
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the minor. I firmly believe
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of
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the strongest one is that youth competing in
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different
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competitions have good mental and physical health which very essential for
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, it can
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college if they are not admitted by their academic results. The
sport
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competition certificate can help
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to get the admission through admission quota. On the flip side, there are certain people advocating
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the concentration and focus of the students will be more on
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sports rather than
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education. The students will perform
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in their academics by
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day.
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, some years ago one friend of mine was a bright student , intelligent in
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school and
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every year. Agglomerating all the points, I hereby again favour my opinion that
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of participating in sports competitions do not affect the education of teenagers.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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