IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

WRITING TASK I You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK I You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.
#minutes #show #results #survey #adult #education #first #adults #study #people #costs #report #university #lecturer #information
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The chart and pie chart below, contain information on the purpose of the study among
adults
, and their opinions on how the wage for each course should be split. Taking a look at the table below, it’s obvious that about 40% of adult students are studying because they are interested in the course which they are studying , followed closely by 30% of
adults
 enrolling in education for the goal of gaining a specific qualification in that area. The remaining fourth the
adults
 are learning a major
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 because 22% of them believe it will guide them in the job they are currently working. 20% of
people
 are cultivating, in order to gain their chances of getting promoted in their working company or industry. One-fifth of
adults
 enrolled in a study program
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 because they simply enjoy learning about the major they have taken part in. 12% of
adults
 demand to change their job in the future,
as a result
, they are educating themselves,
therefore
 switching jobs. The least common reasoning as to why
adults
 are educated
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 is to greet and interact with other
people
, with an approximate rate of 9% of adult students. The pie chart given here
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 represents details about how
people
 think that the fees of each course need to be separated. From their point of view, individuals have to pay 40% of the cost, which is most of the costs, employers must pay 35% of the payment, and taxpayers need to pay 25% of the tuition fees. In conclusion, as the provided information says, most
people
 are studying, mainly because they are interested in their program and from
people
’s view, individuals should cover most of the costs of the courses.
Submitted by foad.marashi on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words adults, people with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: