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Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle. Other believe that government should take care of it. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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The physical well-being of every citizen is extremely important for the growth and development of any country.
However
, in
this
 fast-moving world, many people do not care about their own health
due to
 their busy schedules.
Although
 many people believe that they are responsible for their own healthy lifestyle, others say that the ruling authority should care for the public's physical well-being. I personally believe that it should go parallelly. I will explain
this
 issue in the following paragraphs with some examples. At the outset, physical fitness is vital for every individual and there are several factors influencing it. Most of them are under the control of the public.
For example
, Eating habits, exercise, mental stress at the workplace or home and smoking habits are mainly decided personally.
Therefore
, self-control is necessary to overcome these factors rather than believing in rules and regulations.
On the other hand
, some other causes should be dealt with by the government
such
 as sanitation, waste management, water supply and immunization which
also
 influence the well-being of society. Rules and regulations are important to maintain a safe supply of these services.
Further
, making arrangements for sports and leisure activities
such
 as playgrounds, stunning beaches and jogging pathways
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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also
 the responsibility of the government. In conclusion, ensuring a personal healthy lifestyle is a collective responsibility of the individual
as well as
 of authorities with the major role in the individual's hand.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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