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More and more people are relying on their private cars as a major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over resilience on cars can cause and suggest atleast one possible solution.

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consept
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concept
 people
uses
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using
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 their private
transportation
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 can make more
problems
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.
Community
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The community
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they
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are using the vehicle more negative
problems
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.
Firstly
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, private
transportation
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 used more pollution in
environment
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the environment
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. Governments are
more
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the more
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 systematic
quality
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about quality
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 of the public
transport
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. We can
transport
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railways
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by railways
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.so we avoid more
crowded
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crowds
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from
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apply
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the
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apply
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private
transport
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. In
London
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,London
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 there is more capacity for
the
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autos and make more traffic
in
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on
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roads
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the roads
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.
Mostly
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 popularity needs to travel
there
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their
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 own vehicles.
Moreover
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, the poor public
transportation
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 in some countries. There are several measures of the government and individuals make the
problems
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 solve. Governments should take the action.
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However
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 the main public measures developing the people's
problems
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 and will reduce to use the
private
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of private
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transportation
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. We should choose
others
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other
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 major
transportation
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 like trains,taxis and buses? Public authorities should arrange and save the
people
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people's
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 situations. If we are used
the
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more impurities and increased the c02. So should avoid and
solved
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 the community
problems
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. In
conclusion
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 we can manage
over
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apply
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resilience on cars can be the reason. To changes to use more individual
transport
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 to overcome the main situations like
bad
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a bad
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 planet.

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