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Living in large cities today poses many problems for people. What are these problems? Should governments encourage more people to live in smaller towns?

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There is no denying the fact that the main impact of
overpopulation
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 is arguable.
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 it is a commonly held belief that a high number of
population
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 have become immigrated to the urban
areas
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 which
lead
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leads
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 to
immense
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an immense
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 dilemma.
This
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 essay will shed light upon some problems and solutions
of
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overpopulation
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.
Overpopulation
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 may cause multiple problems. To
begine
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begin
 with, exploiting automobiles in
the
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urban
areas
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 may lead to
soar
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 environmental pollution.
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, the masses who immigrated to the city
,
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 may utilize vehicles extensively, which may result in excessive emission of
greengases
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green gases
greenhouses
greengages
.
Subsequently
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, a high amount of air pollution can lead to many
deedly
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deadly
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 diseases
such
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 as asthma and lung cancer.
Furthermore
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,
overpopulation
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 may rise the issue of o
vercrowed
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overcrowded
.
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, a prestigious journal article published that the folks in New York
city
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,
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 reported that the time they need to commute to their work became
double
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. Indeed, it becomes apparent that
overpopulation
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 can impact
the
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urban
areas
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 negatively.
On the other hand
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, there are several approaches
can
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that can
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 be used to tackle
such
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issue
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issues
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.
First,
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increasing
jobs
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oppurtunities
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opportunities
 in
the
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remote
areas
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 can be a good solution. To illustrate, if the authority offered people jobs outside the urban
areas
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, a large amount of
population
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the population
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 will immigrate to those places.
As a consequence
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, the proportion of folks in
the
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urban
areas
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 will become less,
as well as
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 the dilemma of air pollution will
decrese
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decrease
.
Thus
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,
this
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 makes it clear that the government may need to
interfer
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interfere
 in order to solve
such
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problem
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a problem
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. In conclusion,
overpopulation
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have
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 become a serious issue.
However
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, the authority may help to solve
this
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 problem by introducing factories in the rural
areas
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 which may increase the work opportunities in
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this area
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these areas
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.

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