A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Shivam, Hope you are doing well. I know you are looking for some suggestions regarding doing activities

such

as camping during the July month holidays. In Alberta, the best place for camping is Abraham Lake, it's near

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Banff. The best part is that it is almost free during summer vacation for children and a 30% discount is offered to adults and aged people.

However

, despite that river-side rafting is

also

open at that time

instead

of winter, when the whole lake is frozen. I'm totally sure you would love to visit there.

Besides

all the benefits it offers, the major problem is in relation to children, it's not a safe place for them. An increase in the number of mites, and insects may lead to health-related problems

such

as Malaria, Typhoid, etc.

Secondly

, finding accommodation is difficult as it is a tourist place, so reservations are done almost 2 months in advance. If you want I would love to accompany you and your's family, as it's the best time. Let me know,

then

we will plan the itinerary

according to

that. Hope to meet you soon, Best Regards, Aanchal

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Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

191 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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adventure
serenity
outdoors
refreshing
hustle and bustle
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unpredictable
wildlife
adequate preparation
physical demands
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