In many countries, as people are earning more these days, they are also spending money in buying more and more items. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Nowadays
peole
Correct your spelling
people
are being more materialistic and trying to get all the luxuries in their lifestyle as they have desires or see other. Only one thing can help to
acheive
Correct your spelling
achieve
that goal
that is
money
and
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
we will discuss
about
Remove the preposition
apply
show examples
the negative and positive
affects
Correct your spelling
effects
show examples
of
this
development
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
human life.
This
is
era
Add an article
the era
an era
show examples
of
Submitted by Giggi on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: