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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate that Australia's domestic usage of
energy
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 and the percentage of green
gas
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 emissions occur
due to
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this
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energy
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 consumption.
Overall
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, heating and water heating are the most significant
energy
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 consumer,
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 cooling is the smallest figure. In comparison, other appliances and water heating are responsible for the large green
gas
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 emission and the lowest percentage made by cooling. Lighting and refrigerators and other appliances are accounts for 4%, 7% and 15% respectively of use in
energy
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 and it is double their values when green
gas
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 emissions. It's about 8%,14% and 28%.
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, cooling and water heating require
energy
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 at about 2% and 30% respectively and these figures released green
gas
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 slightly increase than consume. Heating is the largest
energy
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 user in the Australian domestic environment and it is 42%.
However
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,
according to
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 the
energy
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 usage of heating and green
gas
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 emission almost half of
proportion
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the proportion
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. It is made up of 15%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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