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the world of work is changing rapidly and people cannot depend on the same job or the same condition of work for life.discuss the causes and give your suggestions on how people should prepare for workin the future

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Despite the improvement in
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 conditions, working hours and
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 environment, the definition of
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 and its shape changed quickly. Recently most authors believe people are not influenced by their same
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 or the features of
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.
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 essay will discuss the causes of
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 problem and available solutions for it. The two main causes of altering
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 and its condition are massive development in artificial intelligence (AI) and remote working which are dominating the
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 sector recently.
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AI is
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common sense for workplaces which is completing activities or tasks with algorithms.
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, lots of companies give an
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 for machines and software than other people.
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, the famous streaming service Netflix uses artificial intelligence for developing users' interfaces, preferences for movies and choices.
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distant working is changing the understanding of jobs and offices.
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, some software engineers start working
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 offices during the pandemic and other companies follow
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 trend rapidly.
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 the effect of AI and distant working
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 changing the model of
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, employees may adapt to
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 system easily. In my opinion, the integration of personal skills can lead to different
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 modalities in close future. People who consider their
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 as office
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 may adapt their jobs to the remote working modal. It will assist in both developing refreshed working conditions and altering old fashion
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 understanding.
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, there are many challenges for
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new
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work
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such
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 as the integration of artificial intelligence and remote working. Adapting jobs and integration with AI will be possible solutions for these challenges.
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