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The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart displays the percentage of British viewers
in
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radio
 and television between October and December 1992.
Overall
, the population
age
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 over four years old watching TV and listening to
radio
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the radio
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 both experienced a fluctuating trend in two months.
Radio
 has
a
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the
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 highest
listeners
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number of listeners
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 during noon time
in
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contrary to television viewers
that
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apply
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skyrocketed at midnight. During the day, the population in
UK
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the UK
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 prefer to listen to
radio
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the radio
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 at 0600 hours at almost 8%. The numbers increased rapidly about 28%
pass
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past
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 the time 0800 hours. Almost half of the population
were lessen
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were lessened
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 during 0300 in the afternoon at 12%. The number continues going down about 2% at 0200 midnight but slowly increased again at 0600 hours to almost 5%.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words radio with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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