Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

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These days,
people
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spend most of their
time
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out of the house working or going out with their friends. Some
people
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think that sugary products should be more expensive to encourage
people
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to consume less
sugar
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. I completely agree with
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view.
Firstly
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, the government should approve supervision rules for restaurants, foods, and snacks. Because men and women spend most of their
time
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out of their apartments working or having fun with friends and they don't have
time
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to cook and have a house cook. So they have no options to buy food or coffee and snacks
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as cake on break
time
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which has
sugar
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.
As a result
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, compared to the past, the lifestyle has completely changed and the government should assign a budget for the supervision of food to become healthy.
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, the government can approve tax laws on foods which has
sugar
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to make
people
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can't buy sugary meals.
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, some
people
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believe that our body needs to have
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for energy.
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, enough
sugar
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is not bad but more than enough causes many health problems. In conclusion, you need to have
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but if you use more than needed, it makes the body harmful.
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